Everyone else was dressed in the type of clothing you would see hanging on tenement clotheslines. --- Perfect!!!
A little tip, if you'd accept my uneducated opinion; I'm not sure about this sentence: A smell that he tried to avoid realizing might be piss.
I dunno, it just seems such a distinctive stench, piss, that the word "might" doesn't work for me. Nor maybe the trying to avoid realising something. Just my thoughts! I don't want to make suggestions for alternative sentence, it's your baby and I already know you're a master of sentences.
What's the novel situation, by the way? Still in progress or can we read it somewhere?
Lovely imagery as always. Cool name for a theater!
Everyone else was dressed in the type of clothing you would see hanging on tenement clotheslines. --- Perfect!!!
A little tip, if you'd accept my uneducated opinion; I'm not sure about this sentence: A smell that he tried to avoid realizing might be piss.
I dunno, it just seems such a distinctive stench, piss, that the word "might" doesn't work for me. Nor maybe the trying to avoid realising something. Just my thoughts! I don't want to make suggestions for alternative sentence, it's your baby and I already know you're a master of sentences.
What's the novel situation, by the way? Still in progress or can we read it somewhere?